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[millie]

Land Name: Cascata

Queen Type Person: Onibi

Land Description: Deep inside the forest of Cascata are beautiful fields with lushes green grass that flows in the wind. There is a huge lake; not too deep around the edges, so the foals can splash in the water, but in the center of the lake it is deep so the horses can swim in it. However the real beauty is a huge waterfall in the heart of Cascata, it flows and crashes down in all it roaring beauty. Thus the name of this beautiful land, Cascata; waterfall in Italian.

[Thea]

Wow...knock off Kleos a little bit?

Nestled deep within the forest walls of Kleos lies a magnificient waterfall.

Nestled deep inside the forest walls of Cascata

Be aware that first person isn't necessary. It's a descriptive paragraph, not a telling of the lands history. Save that for kick-ass plottage.

[millie]

I changed the bit at the start a bit. And I deleted the plot bit. xD